Silhouette

September 8, 2008 — Leofina Jane

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19 Responses to “Silhouette”

  1. deanjbaker Says:
    September 8, 2008 at 11:43 am

    really like what you are saying in this, and how it is said

  2. drippingmind Says:
    September 8, 2008 at 12:11 pm

    Hello Dean,:-). That’s a lovely comment. Thank you so much!:-)

  3. ellumbra Says:
    September 8, 2008 at 12:24 pm

    Beautiful . . .

  4. drippingmind Says:
    September 8, 2008 at 12:39 pm

    Hey Tim,:-) how are you?

    Thanks! I can’t access my yahoo for the past days, something to do with my provider, I guess. I hope it will be fixed soonest,:-).

  5. YogaforCynics Says:
    September 8, 2008 at 5:41 pm

    Very interesting…about meeting someone at a dance, but clearly so much more as well…..

  6. dreammer Says:
    September 8, 2008 at 9:10 pm

    Yes, you caught
    me,
    naked-
    exposed like
    a ghost, hiding
    behind clouds of
    illuminated
    fallacies.
    Lovely lines………beautiful. What it feels to be at dance with someone you care to be with and much more is expressed through your pen in just three sentences in verse……….

  7. drippingmind Says:
    September 9, 2008 at 3:50 pm

    Yogaforcynics, thank you very much for the comment,:-).

    Sometimes, Life is like a dance. It’s liberating, it is freedom. I came to realize a lot of hidden truth while “dancing” with Life.

  8. drippingmind Says:
    September 9, 2008 at 3:56 pm

    Dreammer, how are you, dear?:-) I am happy to see you again,:-).

    I tried to write the poem in such a way that the reader would see multiple angles. The challenge for me had been how to use simple words and come up with that purpose,:-)

    Thanks for your comment!:-)

  9. drippingmind Says:
    September 9, 2008 at 4:02 pm

    HighonPain, I would definitely appreciate the intent visits, :-) . Thank you for your inspiring comment.

    I’d like my poetry to be an embodiment of substance and simplicity. “Simplicity is beauty”, itsn’t that what they say?:-).

    I am thankful that you liked my poetry, bless you!

  10. drippingmind Says:
    September 9, 2008 at 4:06 pm

    Yey. Dreammer, sorry. I should have said….

    …how to come up with verses through common, simple words, that fulfills my poetic purpose at the same time…

    Sorry,:-).

  11. sarah flanigan Says:
    September 10, 2008 at 1:56 am

    reality came-
    disguised as
    silhouette.

    gorgeous phrasing – i like your style – it’s soft like summer rain.
    sarah

  12. Max Coutinho Says:
    September 10, 2008 at 3:07 am

    Hey Leofina!

    My Lord…what can I say here? I loved this poem so much:

    “Your eyes held
    me, not long
    before you
    breathed
    fire-
    so intense, that
    consumed me-
    whole.”

    I know this feeling; it is like you’re being sucked off your own being…so intense!
    I also loved the first part “I came for a dance” this suggests so many things, so many types of dance…very well written *clap clap clap*!! :D

    Cheers

  13. drippingmind Says:
    September 11, 2008 at 3:53 am

    Hello Sarah, thank you so much!:-)

    A comment like that from a very good poet such as yourself do means a lot!:-)

  14. drippingmind Says:
    September 11, 2008 at 4:00 am

    Why, Max you are a dear!:-) my pen is blushing with your generous and inspiring comment! Thanks very much, Max, bless you!

    By the way Max, your blog is addictive, lol! :-) . Absolutely wonderful, really. What a coincidence, a friend of mine, do call me Leo (pronounced as Li-yo), that was in college,:-). I would welcome you calling me the same,:-).

  15. eugene Says:
    September 14, 2008 at 3:15 pm

    lites hue too

    did i torch your
    soul to point
    of fear
    my dear one

    or nudge you a bit
    to smile and a blush
    enough

    to spring budding
    thoughts
    that lingers
    up to this time

  16. drippingmind Says:
    September 14, 2008 at 3:51 pm

    That’s a very good one, eugene.:-) Thank you for sharing!

  17. Sayan Says:
    September 14, 2008 at 5:43 pm

    i am filled with mixed emotions!
    to be exposed, to become vulnerable, to someone else… i dread the very thought of it.
    yet, it is all i desire… to meet someone who could see straight thru me; who could see the real me… know me.
    a wonderful read, jane!!

  18. drippingmind Says:
    September 14, 2008 at 11:34 pm

    I can relate to that, Sayan.:-).. The pull and push of emotions and reasons.., wants and fears..

    While some would compromise a lot just to stay within the illusionary comforts of their “projected image”, you are longing to get out from it, or so it seems.:-) that’s commendable, Sayan. :-) . If that is to be the case, there would be somebody who can see right through you. Just allow and endure its penetrating gaze, I guess..:-)

    Thank you again, Sayan,:-)

  19. Greatest Heights « Drippingmind Writings Online Says:
    October 4, 2008 at 7:04 pm

    [...] I’ll keep abreast to match each leading steps, though what I see ahead are visions blurred- the promised grandeur is, but a passing silhouette. [...]


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